MCTC Writing Center Training Video Step 5
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These are really, really strong because, if we look back at
this sort of thesis statement that we're working with,
you said that this sort of racism is validated by the U.S. Government
Right here, yeah, Arizona Law SB 1070 at the state level:
Government. National level: the Dream Act is opposed:
government is supporting racist policies.
Totally right.
That's a really strong thesis statement.
Fernando: Thanks.
I can see that you're building to this point,
but when you make this point make sure you've got
data to back it up for real.
But yeah, that's like... that's so crucial.
I think... you kind of strike me as a bit of a "freewrite" kind of guy
you already came to me with such good thoughts
that I feel like we actually did is we sort of...
disciplined and ordered your thoughts.
You were already supporting your main idea.
And so we kind of did stuff here but I really wanna...
after you do these freewrites just challenge yourself to look
at where you're already supporting your main idea
in these really cool ways.
Not everything is totally developed, not everything is totally perfect
it doesn't have to be right now.
Fernando: Yeah, I have a problem with that cause I don't...
I am a perfectionist, so I don't like to turn things in
that are not good.
Vince: That's not necessarily a bad thing.